Mini Critique

 This is a third-person limited point of view because it focuses on Sarah's inner thoughts and emotions while still observing her outward interactions. It allows the reader to know the inner conflict of Sarah, especially her need to show that she was fine when, in fact, she was tired. This is very effective at creating empathy because we can relate to her feeling disconnected and the tension to be able to hide one's vulnerability. This narrow view, however, does not give the reader a chance to know the world from the barista's perspective, and that might add another whole layer to the story.

As for critique, I feel the setting is very vividly described but so clichéd: that tiny, dimly lit café with drizzle and a tired barista. While these elements are great for the atmosphere in this story, one would soon be flooded by the similarity of those stories. There is little beyond Sarah's emotional state in character development-the barista, for example, was mentioned but had no depth, so his relationship to Sarah should have been played out to develop a more dynamic scene.

It is also rather slow-paced, and with not much significant movement in the plot, some readers may be a little disappointed in this narrative. Focusing on internal feelings, though understandable, makes the story really bring no sense of progression-as if just going around in circles; with no clear lead or resolution, it is hard to keep the reader invested. In this kind of narrative, emotional payback or deeper conflict would definitely be needed to bring the reader into the fold.